15 Jan 2017

IELTS Writing Sample with Examiner`s comments/feedback: A Map

 IELTS Writing Sample with Examiner`s comments: A Map

You should spend 20 minutes on this task.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. (This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 7 score.)

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.


Student`s answer

The two maps show the same island while first one is before and the second one is after the construction for tourism.

Looking first at the one before construction, we can see a huge island with a beach in the west. The total length of the island is approximately 250 metres. Moving on to the second map, we can see that there are lots of buildings on the island. There are two areas of accommodation. One is in the west near the beach while the other one is in the centre of the island. Between them, there is a restaurant in the north and a central reception block, which is surrounded by a vehicle track. This track also goes down to the pier where people can go sailing in the south sea of the island. Furthermore, tourists can swim near the beach in the west. A footpath connecting the western accommodation units also leads to the beach.

Overall, comparing the two maps, there are significant changes after this development. Not only lots of facilities are built on the island, but also the sea is used for activities. The new island has become a good place for tourism.

Examiner`s comments

Task Achievement 
This answer clearly presents the key features of the diagrams, and although the first map is described only briefly, this is acceptable for this particular task. The description is accurate thought some aspects, such as the section on the accommodation, could have been more fully extended. The final paragraph summarizes the main points effectively.

Coherence & cohesion:
The information is logically organized and can be easily followed throughout the response. A range of cohesive devices including reference and substitution is used appropriately, with only occasional inaccuracies.

Lexical resource:
Some less common vocabulary and collocations are used appropriately, e.g. central reception block; western accommodation units, and there are no spelling errors.

Grammar:
There is a variety of grammatical structures and many sentences contain no inaccuracies. Where errors do occur, they do not affect understanding.

Overall: 7

12 Jan 2017

IELTS Writing Sample with comments / feedback: Discussion essay

IELTS Writing Sample with comments / feedback: Discussion essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. 

Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. 

What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

An answer by my student in an IELTS class:

       Today, different individuals have varied options about the study option. Some people tend to study in their own country, while other prefer to study abroad. Hence, I would give sone reasons why study abroad better based on my experience.
         There are various reasons why people believe that they have to study in their own country. In this case, study in theirs make them easier than abroad. They don't have to learn about english fluently, because mostly use their own languages. They shouldn't pay expensive living cost. Hence, they feel comfortable at all
         On the other hand, there are some people who believe that they are advantaged by studying abroad. However, studying abroad give them more experiences. It can increase their value as individual by learning in new places. Studying abroad challenge people to get out from their comfort zone, and learn eduacation system as a modern country.
         Additionally, based on my personal experienc that i gathered when went to Japan, I felt there were many things we could get when abroad. Such as, their attitude, discipline, and their education system. 
        To conclude, there are more advantages by studying abroad. It could build our personal value, self confidence, and independent. Thus, it could open our eyes that we could do better things to our country. (214 words)

My feedback

Task Achievement: 5 (214 words); needs more to be balanced (1st body is very limited; the two main ideas are less adequately developed) – I would give a 6 if the author has at least 250 words.

Coherence & cohesion (6): central topic for the third body is not very clear; could be better if put within the same paragraph, or at least one (or two advantages) is well developed. The author mentions a number of advantages, yet lacking details. Linkers are used quite well (e.g., on the other hand, however). Referencing seems to be repetitive (studying abroad – options)

Lexical resource (5.5): Sufficient (6); little or no attempts for less common lexis (5); spelling errors, word formation/choice do not impede communication (6)

Grammar (6): mixed with simple; errors happen, yet they do not hinder communication

Overall: 5.5


Some advice for improvement

        Today, different individuals have varied options about the study option. Some people tend to study in their own country, while other prefer to study abroad. Hence, I would give sone reasons why study abroad better based on my experience.
Different individuals may have varied options … In this essay, I would give some ….
         There are various reasons why people believe that they have to study in their own country. In this case, study in theirs make them easier than abroad. They don't have to learn about english fluently, because mostly use their own languages. They shouldn't pay expensive living cost. Hence, they feel comfortable at all
Pursuing education in one`s own country would be far easier to the extent that he need not spend time studying another language as a preparation to study abroad. Another edge would be due to the fact that he may not need to provide hefty accommodation invoices if he decides to study in a university located in the same place as where he is currently living. Moreover, ….
         On the other hand, there are some people who believe that they are advantaged by studying abroad. However, studying abroad give them more experiences. It can increase their value as individual by learning in new places. Studying abroad challenge people to get out from their comfort zone, and learn eduacation system as a modern country.
Others, on the other hand, seem to believe that studying abroad gives far more experiences such as
         Additionally, based on my personal experienc that i gathered when went to Japan, I felt there were many things we could get when abroad. Such as, their attitude, discipline, and their education system. 
Additionally, based on my personal experience when I visited Japan, I would tend to suggest that (mention one reason and develop it)

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Feedback was provided by Muhammad Ahkam Arifin, graduating from the University of Edinburgh in MSc TESOL (Teaching English to Speakers of Other Languages). He took a class of Language Testing during his studies in Edinburgh, where he had the opportunity to learn how to understand `a rating scale`, as how it is used in the IELTS test. Now, he is actively working as an IELTS tutor. 

11 Jan 2017

IELTS Writing Sample with Examiner`s comments: Opinion essay

IELTS Writing Sample with Examiner`s comments: Opinion essay

The question for an IELTS writing task 2: an opinion essay

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic.

Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Student`s answer

It is believed by many people that the capacity of tackling with problems in the adulthood has a negative relationship with the socio-economic situation of the family. In their view, the better the family condition is, the lower the child’s ability is when he or she enters the adulthood. However, I have a different point of view. In my opinion, children’s capacity to deal with harsh situations has a high coincidence with the parenting style and individual’s own efforts, rather than the amount of money the family owns.

The parenting style has a great impact on the child’s capacity building. Although the children who are brought up in poverty-stricken family may encounter more problems and difficulties, it does not directly lead to the development of one’s ability. When the children are at their ages, it is very vital and necessary for them to develop the positive attitude towards harsh realities as well as strategies to deal with problems under the proper guidance of parents. And this process can take place in either rich or poor family.

The development of one’s ability also lies in his or her own efforts. When the children encounter various problems, it is important for them to acquire appropriate knowledge and techniques to analyze the problems and come up with better solutions through his or her own efforts. It is not very related with the family background, but with the individual’s attitude, i.e. whether he or she would like the learn and improve the capacity or not.

Undoubtedly, whether children are raised up by poor or wealthy parents, they must encounter different types of problems on the way to the adulthood. Under the proper guidance of parents and through their own’s efforts, they will build capacities to tackle with problems and difficulties step by step.

Examiners` comments:

Task Response
The writer shows that he/she understands the question. A clear position is presented throughout the response.

Coherence & Cohesion
Ideas are logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout the writing. The writer commences with a full introduction and brief position, going on to justify this position in two self-contained paragraphs with clear central topics before finishing with a clear conclusion.

Substitution and referencing could be more sophisticated throughout.
“would like the learn and improve …”
“ … on the way to the adulthood …”

Lexical Resource
Despite occasional errors in word choice, such as “when the children are at their ages” and “high coincidence”, there is a sufficient range of vocabulary for precision and flexibility, for instance:
“… negative relationship with the socio-economic situation of the family.”
“… parenting style and individual’s own efforts …”
“… positive attitude towards harsh realities …”
“… child’s capacity building.”
“… poverty-stricken family …”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy
There are a variety of complex structures. A few grammatical errors persist but these do not hinder understanding.
“… it is very vital and necessary for them to develop the positive attitude towards harsh realities as well as strategies to deal with problems under the proper guidance of parents.”
“When the children encounter various problems, it is important for them to acquire appropriate knowledge and techniques to analyze the problems…”

Overall score: 7

8 Jan 2017

Grammar for IELTS with Answers PDF Audio (Free Download)

Grammar for IELTS with Answers PDF Audio (Free)

Grammar for IELTS with Answers PDF Audio
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